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Do you know
Of that perpetual sinking feeling?
You just cry
Each layer of you keeps slowly peeling

Falling down
But it seems so appropriate right now
Steadily
You ended up here but you don’t know how

Eyes closing
Shutting out the painful reality
Biting lips
You hate the way life breathes formality

Seeing truth
Now you wish you were in your fairytale
Where’s it gone?
The happiness we are supposed to hail

Breathing in
You wish you never had to breathe again
Breathing out
It’s time you quit going against the grain

Their ideal
The way we are expected to believe
My ideal
The way I can choose to stay or to leave
©2003-2009 ~readmyspine
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:iconpdxcabby:
this is great
definately thoughtful and thought provoking
makes me remember the times i felt the same and makes me feel the same at the same time

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~Rep-phibian ~SnakeStills
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Breathing in
You wish you never had to breathe again
Breathing out
It’s time you quit going against the grain

Their ideal
The way we are expected to believe
My ideal
The way I can choose to stay or to leave

i see a condradiction in these two verses.. and i :heart: it.

"it's time you quit going against the grain" -- implying that 'they' should stop being so individual.. and just go with the sheep flow

"My ideal
The way i can choose to stay or leave" -- introducing choice and individuality into your persona.

which leaves me thinkiing that/about your feelings being caught between the easy 'flow-with-the-pack' way of life and then the more challenging 'screw-you-im-doing-it-my-way' path.

i like that :peace:
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sorry :lick: i've been anylizing poetry for english for a while now...
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i got an 'A' :w00t:
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:iconreadmyspine:
well i'm glad you picked up that contradiction... i had hoped someone would :)
:iconmeatloafsurprise:
:) glad to forfill your hope :)

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:icongoodmorning:
this is mad, +fav, mad rhyme scheme, mad content, and just all in all mad
:iconesion:
I love it..
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speachless..
+fav

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:iconruzkin:
This is excellent - the feeling in this is intense, and the structure works perfectly. I really want to go home now just so I can set this to music. Brilliant work!

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:iconsmokeybear:
:D Very nice!!!
Nice to finally meet you too!! :love:
:hug:
:iconreadmyspine:
go ahead, i'd love it if you used them as lyrics :)

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