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straying in your unchained state
sweeping the fields with your arms outstretched
ready for the end
no longer afraid of losing control.
this is it,
your final show.
the last entry in your existance
staining your fingertips...
breathing in eagerly,
your eyes chant the closing words
©2003-2009 ~readmyspine
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:iconsilent-screamer:
"no longer afraid of losing control."

... that would be absoutly terrifying to know somebody like that ... or to be like that yourself

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Whatever happened to Sex, Drugs & Rock'n'Roll?
Now all we have is AIDS, Crack and Tecno.
:iconcuchullain12:
no. some people take masochistic pleasure in it. then again, some people say i'm insane. whatever works. still, that's just my opinion. i can't speak for her.

great poem, by the way.

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If it's beyond your wildest dreams, then your dreams aren't wild enough...

-Tom
:iconruzkin:
The last entry in your existance... almost Shakespearian. Nice.

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:iconwyn--:
i like this, good work

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My chest is aching, it burns like a furnace. The burning keeps me alive - Byrne
:icongypsyend0rphin:
beautiful poem, I really love the way you've worded it, my fav part is "ready for the end/no longer afraid of losing control./this is it,/your final show." :thumbsup:
:iconreadmyspine:
thank you so much for the comment, i really do appreciate it
:icongypsyend0rphin:
you're quite welcome and anytime at all.. I love commenting on peoples work! =)
:iconlost-mister-me:
this is the kind of thing that seems to bring chills. the whole idea of 'the end' is evident in this. wow.

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"If you can't get someone out of your head, maybe they're supposed to be there."
"She walks away and he faithfully follows."

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