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Torn and used
Stripped and abused
I am falling apart at the seams

I beg for it to cease
And pray for release
As I cower in the corner, shaking

When you'd had your turn
There was more, I learned
And you raped me all over again
©2004-2008 ~readmyspine
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~fuKtHislOVesHit:iconfuKtHislOVesHit: May 1, 2004, 3:01:34 AM
yeh ur rite... not very pleasent
but good word choose n shit like that
paints a great picture (well not great but u no wot i mean)
good work

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i hate the way you mean more to me
...than i'll ever mean to you
i hate the way i feel for you
..and that you'll never feel it too
~fuKtHislOVesHit:iconfuKtHislOVesHit: May 1, 2004, 3:02:56 AM
hmmm i dont no y my thing ddnt show up aye...
but wot i baisically sed was good work...
i like it :peace:

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i hate the way you mean more to me
...than i'll ever mean to you
i hate the way i feel for you
..and that you'll never feel it too
~fuKtHislOVesHit:iconfuKtHislOVesHit: May 1, 2004, 3:03:39 AM
oh great now its showin up...
i feel like a dikhed
sorry mate

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i hate the way you mean more to me
...than i'll ever mean to you
i hate the way i feel for you
..and that you'll never feel it too
~ruzkin:iconruzkin: May 1, 2004, 3:09:15 AM
Dude... very emotive and also very, very depressing. I'm hoping this isn't based on personal experience.

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~readmyspine:iconreadmyspine: May 1, 2004, 3:21:51 AM
your commentS are appreciated :D
~fuKtHislOVesHit:iconfuKtHislOVesHit: May 1, 2004, 3:26:13 AM
yeh soz bout bein such a blonde bitch lol
well i used to b blonde...

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i hate the way you mean more to me
...than i'll ever mean to you
i hate the way i feel for you
..and that you'll never feel it too
~sporkk:iconsporkk: May 1, 2004, 4:05:49 AM
Hmm... so sad, but very nicely written. I like the rhyme scheme in this one. It's unconventional but flows nicely.

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~i-am-what-i-am:iconi-am-what-i-am: May 1, 2004, 2:26:52 PM
my words wouldnt be enough...

beautiful piece
yet
as you say...
not very pleasent